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. : : Chapter Start / Page Index : : Page 38 : : PAGE 39 : : Next Chapter : : .

chapter 1 end.

Chapter 1 End.

OH MAN YOU GUYS

I MADE IT

I FINISHED CHAPTER 1 :dummy:

So all you lurkers who have not been commenting, now would be a GREAT time to voice your thoughts! Or even leave a critique. :3

Thanks for sticking with me these past... what, 8 months? Wow... awesome. It's been awesome, and here's hoping you stick around for the next 50 bajillion chapters! Or maybe I'll be pretentious and start calling them "episodes". IDK.

Don't know when I'll start Chapter 2 -- I'd like to do some character art and planning before I start it, but inspiration and productivity might strike me anyway. xD; Oh well. We'll see how that goes!

Oh, yeah, speaking of chapter 2 -- contest. Who won the cameo? Let's take one more look at the entries:

[link] by ~vixenmel
[link] by *charlot-sweetie
[link] by ~maximaxx
[link] by ~Kaelita-kun
[link] by ~SkittyTails
[link] by ~BlackwaterNoble
[link] by =ELASTAS
[link] [link] [link] [link] and [link] by ~piplup25
[link] by ~metaknight-fangirl13
[link] by ~CoroQuetz
[link] and [link] by ~lightsideluc

Part of the reason this page took so long was because I had to go through all the entries and do some judging. It was really hard... the entries were all fantastic and charming. I really liked the variety I got, especially! Everyone envisions Ash differently and it was cool to see how everyone pictured him in a classroom setting.

In the end though, I've decided that the winner is...

:iconlightsideluc:

Congratulations! While all the entries were really good, :iconlightsideluc:'s writing style was witty and smooth, and despite the hyperactive pacing and short attention span of the narrator it was still easy to follow the storytelling. He was able to include humor, gross humor, action, character development, a short moment of horror (Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn!) and even a dash of romance at the end and yet was able to keep it both cohesive and within the general, light-hearted attitude of the story. :3

So, good sir, either you, your OC, or your Pokésona gets a short, minor cameo in chapter 2, along with ~CyMoahk's as well (since he won the math contest on page 13).

AWESOME! :dummy:

And all you guys who didn't get to enter or didn't win, don't worry, there will be other chances down the road. :3
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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

I GOT THROUGH THE CHAPTER! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/d/d…" width="21" height="15" alt=":dummy:" title="I am a dummy!"/> And I think, IT'S TIME FOR A CRITIQUE <img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/o/h/o…" alt=":iconohyeahplz:" title="ohyeahplz"/> So here we go:

The story is very mysterious. A trait I LOVE in a story. Many twists and turns that keep the audience guessing. The "good" doctor needs a housecall... Anyway, subplots could very well drive out from this (Team Rocket takedown <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/t/t…" width="15" height="15" alt=":thumbsup:" title="Thumbs Up"/> Something I could do <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="15" height="15" alt=":lol:" title="LOL"/>). Onto art quality, it's drawn pretty well, but there are many imperfections (which you pointed out), but no body can be perfect.
Breakdown:
Vision: Good, but with some imperfections. The story is well thought out
Originality: Pokemon, Ashachu. It's not TOO original, but there are many original characters here.
Technique: <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="15" height="15" alt=":lol:" title="LOL"/> The technique is good on both sides, but the story side is better personally
Impact: Well I liked it, didn't I? <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/x/x…" width="15" height="15" alt=":XD:" title="XD"/>
Overall rating: <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star:" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star:" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star:" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star-half:" title="Half Star"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star-empty:" title="No Star"/>