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For 
's My worst nightmare contest.
I sat back and thought long and hard what my worst nightmare would be, the worst possible thing that could happen to me (aside from death- that's too obvious), and the worst thing I could come up with was if my
didn't love me anymore. So thus, this was born.
's My worst nightmare contest.I sat back and thought long and hard what my worst nightmare would be, the worst possible thing that could happen to me (aside from death- that's too obvious), and the worst thing I could come up with was if my
didn't love me anymore. So thus, this was born.Image size
3072x2304px 3.14 MB
Make
SONY
Model
DSC-W55
Shutter Speed
10/130 second
Aperture
F/2.8
Focal Length
6 mm
ISO Speed
320
Date Taken
Jun 19, 2012, 12:00:45 PM
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You requested this piece to be critiqued from FeedbackFrenzy, so here I am .
The concept of the photo is very nice . The message is a personal one, & the title obviously indicates that the message is for, which is lovely . I feel that the title & the words you chose make a good, flowing story . The concept you chose isn't entirely original, but it's still a beautiful thing to shoot & took some creativity on your part, so kudos.!
The paper is simple, yet it holds true to the message . The texture you added by folding & unfolding it was a nice touch, because unlike those photos that have perfect, smooth paper with writing on it, this one has an intensity about it . The audience feels as though we are looking at a piece of paper that has been read countless times & it brings a sadness about it that a perfect piece of paper wouldn't have brought . These words obviously hurt, & we can see that from a detail you chose to add, that most probably wouldn't have thought of . Everything ties in perfectly with the story, which is exactly what an artist wants out of their artwork . You did a wonderful job with that .
As for the negative points I need to critique within the image, I'll be very honest about them . Firstly, the colour of the counter(?) is quite dull & uninteresting . The horrid yellow colour just doesn't bring anything to the image itself because it's not appealing to look at . Perhaps you should have played around with colour, in which I believe monochrome would have been the best option for a photo like this . Black & white could have made this image POP & gotten rid of the yellow, keeping the polka dot detail it has .
The composition isn't bad, with the paper in the middle of the frame, yet I would have preferred if you had shot it at the top right corner or bottom left . This is just my personal preference, however -- something to keep in mind . Things don't always have to be straight in the center to be good, & it being off in a corner could have brought more creativity to the piece . Other then that, you did a good job . The message is the best part, now all you have to do is work on bringing the editing to a point where it enhances your work.!
Happy shooting :]
The concept of the photo is very nice . The message is a personal one, & the title obviously indicates that the message is for, which is lovely . I feel that the title & the words you chose make a good, flowing story . The concept you chose isn't entirely original, but it's still a beautiful thing to shoot & took some creativity on your part, so kudos.!
The paper is simple, yet it holds true to the message . The texture you added by folding & unfolding it was a nice touch, because unlike those photos that have perfect, smooth paper with writing on it, this one has an intensity about it . The audience feels as though we are looking at a piece of paper that has been read countless times & it brings a sadness about it that a perfect piece of paper wouldn't have brought . These words obviously hurt, & we can see that from a detail you chose to add, that most probably wouldn't have thought of . Everything ties in perfectly with the story, which is exactly what an artist wants out of their artwork . You did a wonderful job with that .
As for the negative points I need to critique within the image, I'll be very honest about them . Firstly, the colour of the counter(?) is quite dull & uninteresting . The horrid yellow colour just doesn't bring anything to the image itself because it's not appealing to look at . Perhaps you should have played around with colour, in which I believe monochrome would have been the best option for a photo like this . Black & white could have made this image POP & gotten rid of the yellow, keeping the polka dot detail it has .
The composition isn't bad, with the paper in the middle of the frame, yet I would have preferred if you had shot it at the top right corner or bottom left . This is just my personal preference, however -- something to keep in mind . Things don't always have to be straight in the center to be good, & it being off in a corner could have brought more creativity to the piece . Other then that, you did a good job . The message is the best part, now all you have to do is work on bringing the editing to a point where it enhances your work.!
Happy shooting :]