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The Mating Season

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The copse was luminous and inviting.
Balmy winds shifted and the leaves swirled in tuneful coils.
He crushed the vivid ambers and yellows with grimy boots;
Feet scuffing the supple earth with each enthralled step.

She inhaled a surging gust
and spread her arms in temptation.
Her warm breeze thrust him in
and he clung to her, obsessed.

Undeniably beautiful was she, that he didn't comprehend
the brambles that curled around her legs
and the twigs that rose in the deep red of her verdant hair.

Her lips were soft and her touch bewitching,
like the undisturbed soil next to a water's edge.
That's where he laid her down
and took all that could be given.

Through slumber he was not aware what soon would be returned.

Damp mists and darkness engulfed the quieted creek;
the ambers had drained and washed away the essence of the marsh.
Cold awoke all visitors - disenchanted.

Gales were silenced and the darkness moved only for one sound;
the breathing of a heavy beast whose power had since ruptured.

Disbelieving and horrified
he bellowed his regret.
Screams awoke her yellow eyes
and cries forced fur & scales to act.
Her claws deep into his throat,

"Fret not, for you've been given all you asked."

A whimper and a sigh, and her melodious voice rang out,

"You please me like no other man; you must return again."

Pleading in vain and squirming to no avail;
through dripping words she swayed him  
with dark promises of a growing beast who would be born

unhindered.

A pact he made and avoid he would the trepidation of his sin.
Home is where he left, and to the forest he returned.
When colors reappeared, he entered her warm glen...

disillusioned by the mists and fearful of his huldrebarn.
:nuu:

Another poem!? No way.



This is my entry for #GrimGloomTale's Autumn Shades Contest. :happybounce:

I love the dark, eerie, Grimm tone this group has. Even though I don't have much in my gallery to submit, I love watching other deviants create art based on these themes. I tried my best to play along the same lines & adhere to the contest theme.

For those of you who don't know,

The Huldra are seductive forest creatures found in Scandinavian folklore.

In some traditions, the huldra lures men into the forest to have sexual intercourse with her, rewarding those who satisfy her and often killing those who do not. The Norwegian huldra is a lot less bloodthirsty and may simply kidnap a man or lure him into the underworld. She sometimes steals human infants and replaces them with her own ugly huldrebarn (changeling huldre children). In some cases, the intercourse resulted in a child, being presented to the unknowing father. In some cases, she forces him to marry her.

Please provide any criticism :la:... however harsh. :sniff:

:heart: `OfOneSoul

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Credit for the preview image goes to ~SeraphVesna. Please :+fav: the original preview image at their deviation, CE - Huldra: Savage Seductress.
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This poem definitely impressed me. Your tone is perfect for it, the way you use your lettering it gives me chills, it's exciting in every way. The way its structured is good too, it sent me on a journey that I haven't been on before, and I definitely haven't heard a poem quiet like this. Your writing style is AMAZING not to mention alluring. But, here comes the fixation part xD

I think, you should make a better transition. Near the end it was hard to tell what happened, and it was unclear what was going on. The tone was overall good, but somehow it felt rushed, and unclean in that area. Try reading it out a few times see how that works. Other then that GREAT JOB, and I really loved it ^^