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So I decided on posting one of the poems I carry with me, an elegy written by my parent (read, my "father").
For the most part, it is condemning acts of wanton killing of bags whom are disregarded generally by people as useless objects.
For the most part, it is condemning acts of wanton killing of bags whom are disregarded generally by people as useless objects.
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Prettyflour here on behalf of 
with the critique your requested.
I want to start by saying that I appreciate the glossary section, but I have to admit that I would have preferred it in your comments rather than as part of the poem. Was there a specific reason would did it this way? Just curious. J
I do think your message was clear, your words seemed very well thought out and that is something I appreciate in poetry. I find that the flow worked well, and it was easy to read. Overall, I very much liked it and I honestly have no constructive criticism to offer.
Thank you for sharing your words and I hope you have a great night!
with the critique your requested.I want to start by saying that I appreciate the glossary section, but I have to admit that I would have preferred it in your comments rather than as part of the poem. Was there a specific reason would did it this way? Just curious. J
I do think your message was clear, your words seemed very well thought out and that is something I appreciate in poetry. I find that the flow worked well, and it was easy to read. Overall, I very much liked it and I honestly have no constructive criticism to offer.
Thank you for sharing your words and I hope you have a great night!