You know how you sometimes feel

hmmm I'm not much one for critiques since I blatantly depend on talent and hubris for most of my works but for your donation and dedicated enjoyment of my works ill try. First as a personal preference as a reader i like diversity within the words I read. Not necessarily eloquence but a range within the words. This is not said specifically about this piece since the repetition was entirely purposeful and well done ;however, I found a pattern simplistic words. Secondly your use of punctuation. I some pieces there's no punctuation whatsoever making it seem like were meant to read the piece in a fevered rush without pause or breaks  and in pieces like this one a break at every line. Punctuation in poetry is meant to display how the literature is meant to be read, each on implying a break or pause within the piece. These breaks must b placed skillfully in order to help the impact. I understand if you find difficult or troublesome since I feel the same myself, often having difficulties with it but I still try to help the pieces impact with the simple addition (or usually subtraction) of punctuation. Thirdly, also interconnected to this , is the rhythm of your pieces. Put simply ive found none or little. Even pieces with specific rhyme schemes lacked rhythm necessary for them to be read well. You don't use your syllables economically. One this piece specifically towards the end the sentence lengths become so varied that certain felt more as though they were two. Ummm that's all for the obvious criticism . I can't offer much advise since as I said I depend on talent and hubris but I also don't think that your work is bad. Your meaning are obvious and hard felt likely to cause alot of people to empathize and your word choice is currently simplistic and likable. Nothing meant to confuse and hide from the reader. You want the reader to know and relate to your struggles and they can.
Not gonna bother to reread all this so plz ignore all typos XD