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Wow, the news brought by Angell Bunny must really be something, because it caused Fluttershy’s nose to spontaneously shrink in-between panels. Also, let’s pretend that the watering can did not magically vanish but was simply put away somewhere between panel 1 and 3, m’kay?
Sorry for not-so-good art and short, lacking epicness story (it will be only five pages long) but this comic is meant as a practice of doing stuff on the scheduled time and not leaving the project until it is finished (let’s say that it’s a kind of self-therapy). That’s why this time I put punctuality and systematic work above anything else. Here goes the schedule of updates:
A Little Kindness
Page 1: YOU ARE HERE
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I dont know the characters and will just talk about this page, ok?
DoubleDandE's made a nice review of it, and I especialy agree with the shadows... I think it would add a lot with little extra effort.
Anyway, for me, you made a nice page, easy to "read", dinamic and the characters are nicely done (ignoring the shrinking nose). It's a nice first page and as it should be it makes the reader want to read more.
You've made a risky choice by using the first panel as both establishing shot and presenting the protagonist. Thankfully you did the right choice to draw full body of Fluttershy and a big panel for us to see the scenary. But the scenary appeared too flat. Some parallax (farther= smaller) or a horizon could help. In this regard, if you draw the fence as convergent lines with the vanishing point to the far left, I believe it would give a more 3d effect.
I would like to make same considerations about the third pannel's background color. Yellow pony over light orange has a problem of "hidding" your character, BUT has a huge upside of giving a big contrast against the other green backgrounds. I would use it's hair, with darker shadows surround it's head to make a contrast and make it standout.
Overall, its a nice first page, with nice colors and details, but more important, it catches the reader right from the beggining.
I dont know the characters and will just talk about this page, ok?
DoubleDandE's made a nice review of it, and I especialy agree with the shadows... I think it would add a lot with little extra effort.
Anyway, for me, you made a nice page, easy to "read", dinamic and the characters are nicely done (ignoring the shrinking nose). It's a nice first page and as it should be it makes the reader want to read more.
You've made a risky choice by using the first panel as both establishing shot and presenting the protagonist. Thankfully you did the right choice to draw full body of Fluttershy and a big panel for us to see the scenary. But the scenary appeared too flat. Some parallax (farther= smaller) or a horizon could help. In this regard, if you draw the fence as convergent lines with the vanishing point to the far left, I believe it would give a more 3d effect.
I would like to make same considerations about the third pannel's background color. Yellow pony over light orange has a problem of "hidding" your character, BUT has a huge upside of giving a big contrast against the other green backgrounds. I would use it's hair, with darker shadows surround it's head to make a contrast and make it standout.
Overall, its a nice first page, with nice colors and details, but more important, it catches the reader right from the beggining.