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Jonah x Jager page two (critique pliz)

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"The Jäger".. Jonah's imaginary friend from his childhood came back,when he most needed him, he did the "hard work" when he couldnt, he had to kill, torture and make a great show... he just wanted Jonah to be safe, even if that meant to transform into a "deep web's superstar" .. can you blame him for doing that?
 
questions: 

---it looks professional?
---if you would see it on a library... would u buy it?
---does it give the thrill of suspense or that there is something creepy coming?
---should i add something? fix something? or practice more on something? 


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Jae-IKumaI's avatar
That guy holding the box must have long arms.
Anyway, maybe you could fix them so they'll be a little less long?
The hands could be a little bit more bigger, maybe use more rectangular boxes than square shaped.
You should fix some grammar, make it make more sense, but other than that...
You're pretty good! Better than me. (I also want to become a mangaka, but mine suck so bad, I don't finish them)
So, keep at it! :D
And, I would definitely buy it if I saw in a store/library! :DD